Journal Entry
I tried to pull Don off me but it didn’t work so I tried again and it worked. I rushed to the hospital with Don on my back like a fireman's lift and got there just on time I wrapped his arm round my shoulder and lay him down on the bed and rushed to a nurse.There I was in the hospital hand on his shoulder him on the bed and said don’t worry Don you will be alright. Today was a strange day and didn’t feel right. Then Don said there's something on my conscience, I am a scab and have all this time. I would have thought he would have said that earlier but he didn’t. I had tears in my eyes almost crying.So I Guess that’s it then Don yes mate that’s it and he closed his eyes and slowly died. See you Don I said and held his warm hand. To me war is silly because if you wanted to go to war it’s like saying you want to kill yourself but I guess the men had to do it for their country to either lose or win plus the friends you lose aswell.
Good piece of writing braden
ReplyDeleteGreat, Braden. Your story has a clear message that makes the audience think! A next step would be to check sentence starters and punctuation.
ReplyDeleteNice work
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